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Financial problems often lead firms to overdraft and cause debt which can become a huge damage to the business. It is extremely important to have financial accountant or manager in a company to build a successful business. Bhattacharyya (2010) states that “Finance for a business can't be undervalued and can be said that it's the lifeline of a business and is required for its well being. It can be said to be a lubricant which keeps the business running.”, this quote explains that financial sector is core part of business. First of all, there is no doubt about most firms greatest goal is to make profit which requires organised plans and distinctive ideas for the firm. In economic based study, people justify profit as total revenue minus total cost which revenue is the entire money that firm earns from sales, while cost is the money consumed to for raw materials. Also, to achieve largest profit for the firm, it requires the highest price of selling and reducing the price of raw materials. But once the quality of the firm’s product is recognised as relatively poor compared to the competitors, then it might cause loss of potential customers due to damaging brand image, so it cannot always minimise the cost for successful business. To analyse sufficient price for material, more financial managers should have been hired to satisfy the managing business.

ref. Bhattacharyya, M. (2010). //Importance of Finance.// Retrieved May 17, 2011. From: []

. Leo: I can see some little grammar errors(e.g. damage to **the** business); Angela may can correct you as she is good at English. I can also see some errors in your reference format I recommend you to check the instruction and check it again.( I think normally we need to put both article's title and journal's name when it is an article. -may be including vol. and issue numbers if possible). BTW I think you found really nice source for your reference !! :) Cheers!

Angela: I remember that I've posted comments for this paragraph before, but probably Young deleted my comments. (PLEASE DON'T DELETE THE COMMENTS! we need those comments as proof that we've all done the requirements for this assignment!!!) I remember last time that I've said your quote was too long and I see that you have fixed this problem, which is great. Maybe the next step for you now is to elaborate more from the quote, perhaps explain what that quote means. Secondly, there is still a grammatical problem in your writing, such as singular/plural problems, some words need apostrophes. In sentences you have repetition errors, such as " it requires __as high price as high__ the firm deserves ..." (the underlined phrase doesn't make sense, if you still don't think there is a problem with this, try reading it out loud, if you might find the sentence hard to say, that means your sentence is either too complex or it doesn't make logical sense)

Young: Thx leo and Angela. I've re-corrected the mistakes and changed some sentence structure to make it more co-herent and added. and I feel really sorry about my mistake last time...cause I didn't realise that I deleted all coments... please tell some detalils that want me to change to... because, I can't really see wrong gramar tense here :)

Angela: Great job with the editing =) This time the whole paragraph really flows together very nicely. Just needed to fix up some small points like we talked about in class today =)

Young: Thanks alot angela!