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Fatima “Educating children for healthy life”
 * Sport and physical activities

The third point about educating children for healthy food habit is the vitality for youngsters to engage with sport activities in order to build up a healthy lifestyle. There are several ways which children can participate in physical activities via physical welfare and creative act or school programes. In addition, it is crucial to inspire them optimistically for doing sport and direct them for their field of physical interest. As a result they will have more self-confidence about their ability to successes in this type of sport. This autumn in Auckland there was a boat show for children states by Rose as cited by Gibbs (2011), he states "the show has brought these organizations together in one place to make it easier for those wanting to find out more about boating." As the name implies, the Discover Boating Center is the real knowledge hub of the show," .Particularly, obese children should be guided by their parents to set a balance diet to keep their level of fitness. According to Chang as cited by Taylor (2009, p.100) children can maintain a healthy body in early age by exercising regularly. Furthermore, they are more likely to be motivated by non-traditional sport such as: Canyoneering**,** Fastpacking, Four Square, Packrafting rather than traditional.

References:

Rose, M. (2011, May 7). Show takes new tack this year. //NZ Herald//. Retrieved from http://www.nzherald.co.nz/nz/news/article.cfm?c_id=1&objectid=10724060

Chang, I. (2009, August). Working Mother. //Move It//, //32//(6), 100. Retrieved from http://ezproxy.auckland.ac.nz/login?url=http://proquest.umi.com.ezproxy.auckland.ac.nz/pqdweb?did=1845654971&sid=6&Fmt=3&clientId=13395&RQT=309&VName=PQD

_ Fatima: could you please help me with the in text reference? Thanks

Eunice: hi :) i think its better to change 'for' into 'a' before 'healthy life style of the first sentence. not sure of this myself too but also I think its better to put creative act instead of creation act in the second sentence. I think you should put a noun after appealing of the third sentence, the sentence sounds incomplete. For the 4th sentence it woulde be better to put " This summer in Auckland there was a boat show for kids managed by Gibbs " ﻿into an active tense, something like ( there was a boat show for kids managed by Gibbs (2011) in Auckland this summer, he says....)

Daisy: i also think the first sentence's "for" need to change to "a". and **show,".** at the end of the fifth sentence. i think is **show."** And if it is possible i think u can write more information about children's physical activities. :p <<<<< Fatima :s can u suggest something in particular.

Eunice: -wrong spelling "hobbit" -should change "sport interest" into "physical interest" in the third sentence -I think "as a result they will gain more self-confidence about what they can do" will be better for the fourth sentence - he states "the show has brought these organisations together in one place to make it easier for those wanting to find out more about boating." As the name implies, the Discover Boating Centre is the real knowledge hub of the show," ﻿your quotation mark doesn't make sense here. there should be a pair of ", but one " is missing.