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Systems Management

Systems management involves using computer technology with the expertise of IT professionals to centralise company's processes. This usually involves with tasks that require monitoring and management skills. As electronic technology increases in popularity in usage, businesses take this opportunity to improve their operations by collaborating with computer technology in order to enhance their efficiency. Ememdo, New Zealand Christchurch technology company helped hospitals to manage the number of patients by creating a system that estimates the number of patients going in and out in a set period of time. Nick Burns, co-founder of Ememdo, explains that this software helps hospitals to manage bed availability and reduces urgent department issues which usually is due to overloading patients (Twose, 2009). In a complex environment such as a hospital, efficient management is required to avoid problems such as lack of bed space which can cause serious issues for the patient in terms of possibility in delaying their medical treatment, which computer systems can effectively ease the situation. Computer systems are becoming very popular for businesses, switching from traditional management using manpower to automated monitoring systems using computer programs, because it benefits them in terms of productivity and efficiency and sometimes can avoid problems from happening which if not taken care of properly it will negative affect the operations of the business.

Twose,H. (2009, November 23). Software can predict patient numbers. //New Zealand Herald Online//. Retrieved May 12, 2011, from: __[]__ __.__ __Leo:__ I think you are already very good at English so I will just suggest some ideas which might be helpful. Dont you think it would be more fluent if we put any proper linking words between the hospital example and the last ending statement? (My vocab level is not that good so now I can think "like this, computer systems are being...." but I know "like this" is informal language.. Anyway, you know what I am talking about. right? and I think if you put the word "productivity" then it would be very nice with "efficiency" what you already wrote. (e.g. increase productivity and efficiency) Cheers

Angela: Thanks Leo, those were great advice. I've added a short linkage at the end of the sentence "In a complex environment such as a hospital, efficient management is required to ..." (I think this is what you suggested, if it's not, please tell me in class on Monday) and I've added the word "productivity" =) See if it is better now.

Young: Good work Angela! your paragraph seems so clear and it demonstates the importance in business and basic information about system management, But I think our topic is more related to business, so it would be great to have business related references, because hospital could confuse readers while reading firm’s segment.

Angela: Thanks Young for your suggestions. I did think about the relevance of the example, but I think the main purpose of the example here is to show that software systems can improve the operations of a business, no matter what type of business it is. (Hospital is a type of business as it earns revenue through fees from patients)

Systems Management

Thirdly, systems management involves using computer technology with the expertise of IT professionals to centralise company's processes. This usually involves with tasks that require monitoring and management skills. As electronic technology increases in popularity in usage, businesses take this opportunity to improve their operations by collaborating with computer technology in order to enhance their efficiency. Ememdo, New Zealand Christchurch technology company helped hospitals to manage the number of patients by creating a system that estimates the number of patients going in and out in a set period of time. Nick Burns, co-founder of Ememdo, explains that this software helps hospitals to manage bed availability and reduces urgent department issues which usually are due to overloading patients (Twose, 2009). In a complex environment such as a hospital, efficient management is required to avoid problems such as lack of bed space which can cause serious issues for the patient in terms of possibility in delaying their medical treatment, which computer systems can effectively ease the situation. Computer systems are becoming very popular for businesses, switching from traditional management using manpower to automated monitoring systems using computer programs, because it benefits them in terms of productivity and efficiency and sometimes can avoid problems from happening which if not taken care of properly it will negative affect the operations of the business.

Angela: Thanks for all the suggestions.